A/C/E/N
Having the antagonist appear in the back of the youtube videos works well. The first scene is still too reliant on dialogue and poorly lit. The second scene is lit well but is confusing. Is there a dead body there and why? Is there someone else in the room? Where are the protagonists' point of view shots? All this needs to be addressed for it to make sense.
J/R/O
Some improvements are clear since the last effort such as the fish eye shot of the antagonist. The earlier scene still needs fleshing out with a shots of the man who calls the protagonist being a victim of an attack and calling him to warn him. Then in the later parts of the film you have continuity errors as Jack sits down and the door opens. Your lighting is rather careless and you need more reaction shots for suspense that we discussed in class. The end of your film is still too weak with too much reliance on long take pov handheld shots and needs to include the suspense we discussed.
You should also use the holiday to consider what you will do with titles as well as to complete your refilming.
F/A/C/J
Filming of the opening scene is proficient with good framing, camera movement and continuity and a greater sense of threat from the antagonist. Please try to film the extra shots we outlined in today's lesson to improve this section. You need to refilm the key section involving Cameron and Freddie ensuring you have evidence of using angles for effect and a rapid editing pace involving suspenseful crosscutting and a range of shots.
Audience feedback should also have been added to the site.
Having the antagonist appear in the back of the youtube videos works well. The first scene is still too reliant on dialogue and poorly lit. The second scene is lit well but is confusing. Is there a dead body there and why? Is there someone else in the room? Where are the protagonists' point of view shots? All this needs to be addressed for it to make sense.
J/R/O
Some improvements are clear since the last effort such as the fish eye shot of the antagonist. The earlier scene still needs fleshing out with a shots of the man who calls the protagonist being a victim of an attack and calling him to warn him. Then in the later parts of the film you have continuity errors as Jack sits down and the door opens. Your lighting is rather careless and you need more reaction shots for suspense that we discussed in class. The end of your film is still too weak with too much reliance on long take pov handheld shots and needs to include the suspense we discussed.
You should also use the holiday to consider what you will do with titles as well as to complete your refilming.
F/A/C/J
Filming of the opening scene is proficient with good framing, camera movement and continuity and a greater sense of threat from the antagonist. Please try to film the extra shots we outlined in today's lesson to improve this section. You need to refilm the key section involving Cameron and Freddie ensuring you have evidence of using angles for effect and a rapid editing pace involving suspenseful crosscutting and a range of shots.
Audience feedback should also have been added to the site.