Connor Alex Enzo Nick
Q1. start with narrative and explain with examples then move onto m/e/c/s
Q2. Check expression and proof read
Q3. Check what you've written about Channel 4 which is not especially big budget and add more research on other relevant British distribution companies
Q4. Nick to complete audience question (use example esay as a guide)
Q5. Needs feedback to rough cut and more specific feedback on pitch
Q6. Nick to complete
Q7. Check against example essay - needs more detail
FCAJ
Only Aaron has made improvements and therefore should gain the highest grade.
Q1. Jack- little or nothing on Barthes- not much on how these codes relate to MECS or narrative in your own film
Q2. Aaron. Check expression. 'meaning that they are wealth' - what is meant by 'ordinary camera angles and shots' or 'low editing pace' - you could still discuss dialogue and casting
Q3 - distribution - you could include that you have a fairly conventional mainstream narrative - carry out and include more research on distributors online- you can have quotes from their sites and examples of films they've distributed that are similar to oyur own
Q4. Cameron - failed to complete
Q5 Cameron - too brief
Q6 Freddie needs more on BBFC - see site
Q7 Freddie - failed to complete
Ryan Ollie Jack
Ryan has now added his section,.
Q1. Could be clearer that as the film is only the opening it can't end with equilibrium as this would be resolved in the remainder of the narrative Needs more on m/e/c/s such as crosscutting for example
Q2. needs more on the representation of the criminal classes - on how the audience is positioned to fear the antagonists - and how the protagonists are more vulnerable and sympathetic
Q3. DISTRIBUTION COMPANIES ACTUALLY arrange the cinema bookings too - you also need more on relevant British film distributors that deal in lower budget films
Q4. you need more on audience - compare yours to other films they might have enjoyed - see what else you can add from the BBFC site
q5. audience feedback is vague and you need a great deal more on the rough cut and your pitch
q6. very little indeed on post production
q7. is very poor indeed